Here's a sample of the Starfox/Smash Bros. story I'm working on. This takes place in a scene where Fox is put to the test by his myterious antagonist, an unnamed man in a black suit and white gloves wherein Fox must dispatch 50 Fighting Wireframes.
This is far from polished, I just finished typing this up while on break between classes today. I'm putting this up to see what you guys think and if any is willing to beta read this. This is generally indicative of my writing style, so it's unproven, not good X^D I'm far from being a writing expert some of you on my friend's list are so any help from those in particular would much appreciated!
Although this involves Starfox, the only character in this part, besides the man and the Wireframes, is Fox McCloud. There's no backstory in this part, so if you haven't played or seen much Starfox you don't need to shy away from this. It's really all action, something in particular I want to try and do good when writing this story as there will be much fighting.
Title: (Part of a) Untitled Story
Series: Starfox/Super Smash Bros.
Characters: Fox McCloud, unnamed Man
Word Count: 2,354 words
Status: This part is in its first draft, the rest of the story is mostly incomplete.
Notes: There's not much plot here on purpose, so I'm more interested in feedback for how to improve my writing and such. I know I'm not a good writer yet! Don't hold back on any feedback :^D
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